Women`s work is an important argumentative topic for talking about.We found that the number of working women in the Egyptian society.Absolutely,some people agree with this phenomenon and others disagree with it.We will talk about the reasons for each opinion in this essay.
On the one hand,some people agree with the work of woman for some reasons such as;Money is one of the reasons for woman to work ,as woman works to help her family,her husband if she is married and provide high standard of living for her children.Divorce is another reason.Women who are divorced especially if they haven`t got any babies,would feel lonely, because they haven`t any thing to do.So,she begins looking for a job to change the style of her life and make herself busy to get ride of the feeling of loneliness.Another reason is flexibility,working woman is flexible,because her work gives her the opportunity to make contacts with other people,unlike woman at home deals only with her family and other relatives and when she meets new people,she would find some difficulties in dealing with them.The last reason is increasing self-confidence.
On the other hand,some people disagree with the work of woman for some reasons such as;household tasks and child rearing ,because some women don`t balance between the work and their family due to lack of time and emotional feelings and the result of this is the lack of love and supervision of children.Those children when they are growing into adults,they have lack of loving family and are ill educated how to raise a family and be good parents in the future.Another reason is that woman faces many problems in her work in the public sector that they are rarely obtaining temporarily permits,so they are forced to resort to a rigid sick to request leaving without paying,while in the private sector ,this can be hardly determined due to the variability from place to place and the absence of the laws of salaries and there is not balance between salaries and the nature of work.Another reason is the society`s point of view on the working woman .In the public sector women are received the best chance of appreciation,respect and less criticism from the society.While in the private sector ,the society`s view is unfair.In most cases back to the community`s mind and stories from the media which is full of mixing that they think that it affects woman`s reputation.So,this view makes many women`s are prevented from working whether in the public or the private sector.An example of it,I once watched an episode of a programme on TV talk about the women`s work.There was a young man possibly in his early 20`s said that he will not allowed his wife to work ,because he believed that a woman`s place is her home.
In my opinion,i agree with the work of woman.So,to say that women should stay at home is a selfish thing and is said by people who only thinks of themselves because our country needs us .We are the driving force behind its progress.So,we all need to work together no matter,a man or woman.
Your draft is good.
ReplyDelete1. We found that the number of working women in the Egyptian society. (what do you mean by this sentence?)
2. On the one hand,some people agree with the work of woman for some reasons such as;Money (I think you better mention all the reasons first, then try to mention each one in details.
3. Another reason is flexibility,(divide this sentence into two)working woman is flexible
4. such as;household tasks and child rearing (wrong spelling)
5.In the public sector women are received(ing) the best chance of appreciation,respect and less criticism from the society.
5. So,this view makes many women(`s )are prevented from working
6. will not allowed (allow) his wife
7. So,to say that women should stay at home is a selfish thing (opinion) and
your topic is good and you organized it very good your introduction has a main idea . your evidences are clear but try to take care of puncituation and words spelling.
ReplyDeletethanks dr.Samah and heba and I will try to avoid making any mistakes again
ReplyDeletehi,yosra.nice draft.your essay is well-developed and organized.it is also very rich.your opinion is clear .your introduction need to be more attractive and i don't understand the second line of it.you have some grammer mistakes try to correct them.
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